Shallow

An abundant world with a scarce vision,
A busy life with no reason,
Believing this a separate mission,
Every soul has developed fission.

Running far from unseen arrows,
Digging a grave beside gallows,
Drenched beneath our sinister halos,
We aspire light from murky shadows.

-Neeldip

27 thoughts on “Shallow

  1. Excellent piece.
    Stunning imagery.

    “Running far from unseen arrows,
    Digging a grave beside gallows”

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    1. Thank you for such kind words๐Ÿ˜‡

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  2. Love the ending ๐Ÿ˜

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  3. Expecting right from the likes of wrongโ€ฆ
    โ€œLight from the shadowsโ€. Good insightful rhyme!

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  4. Perhaps the โ€œfissionโ€ is a desirable thing? Would we want to live in a world where everyone shared the same vision and mission?

    I really liked this! Thanks for the follow!

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    1. Diversity is good, fission is not and ofcource otherwise it would lead to eternal linearity, but the point of concern is the bitterness in emotions which hinders growth or advancement. Thank you๐Ÿ˜‡

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  5. ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ

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  6. Oh, I love this! A thought-provoking and rhythmic piece. Thank you for following BrewNSpew.

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      1. You’re welcome!

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  7. very thought provoking, that last line gets me!

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  8. Hey, how have you got so many followers? You follow my blog too but I barely get 30 people reading my stuff! You seem to have so many.

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    1. It has been some time since i started to write, so maybe that’s the reason, but i would say that don’t write to gain followers write to plant better seeds.

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  9. Not a single word of this poetry that I did not fall in love with! ITS JUST SO BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN. That rhythm…oh, so so beautiful! ๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜โค๏ธโค๏ธ

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    1. Thank you for such kind words ๐Ÿ˜‡๐Ÿ‘

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  10. WOW, this is stellar! Thanks for visiting my blog so I’d know to come over here and have look-see ๐Ÿ™‚

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  11. Nail; head; your words are the hammer! Thank for the post and the follow.

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    1. Thank you for such appreciation ๐Ÿ‘

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  12. This was very descriptive, I really enjoyed it!

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