neeldip199827 Comments on Shallow

Shallow

An abundant world with a scarce vision,
A busy life with no reason,
Believing this a separate mission,
Every soul has developed fission.

Running far from unseen arrows,
Digging a grave beside gallows,
Drenched beneath our sinister halos,
We aspire light from murky shadows.

-Neeldip

27 thoughts on “Shallow”

  1. short-prose-fiction Sep 3, 2019 — 8:12 pm

    Excellent piece.
    Stunning imagery.

    “Running far from unseen arrows,
    Digging a grave beside gallows”

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      neeldip1998 Sep 3, 2019 — 8:36 pm

      Thank you for such kind words😇

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  2. Manic Sylph Sep 4, 2019 — 12:28 am

    Love the ending 😍

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  3. key.yur Sep 5, 2019 — 7:05 am

    Expecting right from the likes of wrong…
    “Light from the shadows”. Good insightful rhyme!

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  4. robgradens Sep 5, 2019 — 5:52 pm

    Perhaps the “fission” is a desirable thing? Would we want to live in a world where everyone shared the same vision and mission?

    I really liked this! Thanks for the follow!

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      neeldip1998 Sep 5, 2019 — 5:59 pm

      Diversity is good, fission is not and ofcource otherwise it would lead to eternal linearity, but the point of concern is the bitterness in emotions which hinders growth or advancement. Thank you😇

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  5. James Bond Sep 8, 2019 — 7:24 pm

    👌👌👌👌👌

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  6. -Eugenia Sep 13, 2019 — 9:09 pm

    Oh, I love this! A thought-provoking and rhythmic piece. Thank you for following BrewNSpew.

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      1. -Eugenia Sep 14, 2019 — 5:22 am

        You’re welcome!

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  7. Hummingbird Sep 16, 2019 — 12:23 pm

    very thought provoking, that last line gets me!

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  8. elijahobrien Sep 18, 2019 — 2:36 am

    Hey, how have you got so many followers? You follow my blog too but I barely get 30 people reading my stuff! You seem to have so many.

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      neeldip1998 Sep 18, 2019 — 10:45 am

      It has been some time since i started to write, so maybe that’s the reason, but i would say that don’t write to gain followers write to plant better seeds.

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  9. R A I N Sep 22, 2019 — 5:21 pm

    Not a single word of this poetry that I did not fall in love with! ITS JUST SO BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN. That rhythm…oh, so so beautiful! 😍😍❤️❤️

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      neeldip1998 Sep 23, 2019 — 12:09 pm

      Thank you for such kind words 😇👍

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  10. Avia Tinder Oct 14, 2019 — 12:36 am

    WOW, this is stellar! Thanks for visiting my blog so I’d know to come over here and have look-see 🙂

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      1. Avia Tinder Oct 14, 2019 — 12:18 pm

        Welcome 🙂

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  11. timsmind390256655 Oct 22, 2019 — 7:24 pm

    Nail; head; your words are the hammer! Thank for the post and the follow.

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      neeldip1998 Oct 23, 2019 — 12:13 am

      Thank you for such appreciation 👍

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  12. tee' Oct 26, 2019 — 8:56 am

    This was very descriptive, I really enjoyed it!

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